What do u think of this poem i just wrote i am 17 plz be honest plz tell me if it sucks or not???

Here I Am








Here I am.


Once again.


Pen in hand.


Finding myself broken.


Everything’s…broken.


Once again.


Here I write.


The words which I cannot speak.


Reflecting on the pain in my heart.


Which leaves me weak.


Once again.


Here I cry.


Tears like rain.


Slip from my eyes.


Every drop, releasing pain.


Once again.


Here I wait.


An empty life.


In this empty place.


Just another lonely person searching for a familiar face.


Once again.


Here I live.


Day by day.


Waiting for hope to find me.


And take me away.


Once again.


Here I stay.


Looking for something.


Anything, to believe in.


That will get me through yet another day.


Once again….


Here I Am.


Here I Write.


Here I Cry.


Here I Wait.


Here I Live.


Here I Stay.





Here I Am….

What do u think of this poem i just wrote i am 17 plz be honest plz tell me if it sucks or not???
ok its good..but dont make it so emo-ish
Reply:dude i like it it sounds awesome and deep girl u got some talent u feel me u got some talent
Reply:in all honesty im not even going to read this entire poem because poetry is an expression of things that mey not be appropriate to say out loud so jus keep venting and dont worry about whether its good or not thas not what poetry is about
Reply:omg that was awesome may i copy paste it i love you rock you willbecome the next robert frost or william shakespear
Reply:It needs more flow. It drags a bit after itself. It lacks a sort of climax and doesn't give much of an impression other than the one it opened with. It's static and simply doesn't work like that.





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Reply:It's a really nice poem, but I can see that you area sad,....and the poem only relfects your inner mood
Reply:I think it's good; you're very good at conveying deep emotion, and that's not an easy thing to do. Don't let these teenage years make you hopeless, though; it does get better. I think it's great that you're using poetry to express yourself. It really helps. Been there.
Reply:i like it. it seems like ur a very intellectual person
Reply:keep it going you got the touch in motion you are great
Reply:You evoked emotion...and you were writing what you felt in the moment...therefore it is very good...thank you for sharing it. Poetry can be very personal sometimes. I liked it.
Reply:Kickass poem
Reply:Depressing, but a nice poem. Good work.
Reply:I write poetry myself and i think it is great!! Sad yes but the reader can feel your pain in your words!! good job :o)
Reply:It's good...anyone who says it's not, doesnt understand that there is no bad poetry....by the way....you might not want to list your poems on here, people can steal them and copyright them.....good though
Reply:good, depressing/sad, but good none the less





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Reply:good i like it
Reply:I love it!





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Reply:i just saved it 2 my computer;)


i think its awesome.


a little on the depressin side but its REALLY good.


...anyway, great job!
Reply:That was really beautiful. I write too, and I really felt that poem.
Reply:I'm not an expert, but thought it was straight!
Reply:it is an excellent poem...you have expressed all agony of a modern man,his loneliness,sadness,his life without sense...it is sad, but that is our reality!
Reply:might need a little tightening up, but I really like it a lot.
Reply:It is very expressive and wonderfully written. I tend to write like that when I am sad or upset. It is really good. You should develop it, write poems, song lyrics, stories, novels. Don't waste your talent!
Reply:its great......


nice and deep.


i have a copy on my comp now


you are a great writer.
Reply:Even though it is sad, it is a way for you as a person to put into words how you are feeling. A very good way to get past the pain of whatever it is that is on your mind or even how happy we are, in turn I believe that you as a poet have a talent keep all you write and someday something may come of it.





Now that's something to believe in, to get you through another day ......





Keep up the good work
Reply:I think your poem is really good,creative and a great way to express your emotions.You should post poems like this more often.
Reply:It's very good writing, but I sincerely hope it's not a reflection of your feelings. It would be bad for an older person to feel that bad, but you are surely too young to feel that bad. But the poem is really great! Keep writing!!
Reply:It's ok...but the "I'm so sad and broken" genre is WAY overdone. Try writing something more upbeat.
Reply:I like it. It also gives you a creative outlet for your feelings. Keep up the good work.. but maybe the next one could be a bit more up beat. It is a little depressing.





Just glad you allowed yourself to let it out.





Keep at it. This is good. Kinda reminds me of a song.





Alex
Reply:It's great!





It's a self-aware poem about how it's a waste of time!
Reply:its beautiful..sounds like how i feel