Check out this poem please...?

I walk alone,


A normal day


So normal, and yet,


Im alone and its dark,


Pitch black dark,


Darker than night,


So dark and yet,


The sun is burning


As white as can be


So i walk,


In the Dark-light


Forever it seems


Through this Day-Night,


and im cold,


just cold,


Not numb, nor empty,


Every breeze bites


And every touch scalds


And then I see you


That familiar face


That warm glow,


And you race,


Into my heart


And all of my veins


This is my story,


Dont you know?


Im walking back home,


Warm.





Honestly is this any good, do i have any hope?

Check out this poem please...?
It is understandable. You don't get a different interpretation each time you read it. You have potential. Poems do not run on and on in one long stanza so you need to make stanzas out of it. Your feelings are all there, not scattered throughout the poem and that is great but separate the sad from the good. When you say " and then I see you" start a new stanza as this is a new feeling in the poem. Keep writing, you will get better with your organization of poetry writing.
Reply:I think you have hope its cute, It needs a little work with the ideas coming together but I got the idea of it and I like that you started off that it was almost sad in a way but then you see the person the only one that brings light into your heart and you almost become alive and shine bright because of this person. Keep it and post more I would like to read another. I write a lot my self and love reading others works.
Reply:needs more of a rhythm


just play with it


it'll be good actualy it will be great
Reply:ya its awesome. get this published
Reply:It is super . Very super.